Adventures in Screenwriting

We wrote our script and it turned out pretty great.

Their names don't matter, but I named the guy Ben so I wouldn't have to keep saying 'man' or 'guy'

This is just a taste of the whole thing, but my partner and I managed to work out the kinks I mentioned in my last post.

1. We established that she leaves him in the end because she is afraid of commitment and feels undeserving of his affection. We need to create a background for this throughout the story… or at least hint at a reason for her leaving at the end.

SOLVED: 

1. We need to add some kind of meaning to each of the face paintings that she gives him. They cannot be entirely random.

SOLVED: 

1. Create a better understanding of what kind of people these characters are e.g. hipsters, homeless, college students, etc.

SOLVED: 

1. I want to make the film with no dialogue, so their intentions need to be communicated nonverbally and there needs to be a good score to accompany it. 

SOLVED:  I have a friend studying at Berklee who is a bass player and a talented composer who said he is willing to score the film for free.