I WROTE A SCRIPT! it sucked...

I really enjoy screenwriting and it is very easy for me to get carried away. Usually a the rule is that one page of script is the equivalent of one minute of screen time.

So after doing some complicated math, I would have needed to write a two-pager to fit in the two minutes. Well... I accidentally wrote five.


I understand it is implausible to turn a five-page script into a two-minute film, but I was mainly focused on developing and completing the idea







I obviously don't expect anyone reading to actually read the script, but the gist of it was that Trevor (the main character and killer) began to creep on his neighbor (Lily) and then pretended a mannequin was her, and then pretended to be her dog and killed her.

It's strange and convoluted, I know.

Aside from it being way too long for the purpose of our project, it also did not stay true to the story my partner and I wanted to tell. The character was too creepy and the story did not have the same weight as movies we drew our inspiration from like Taxi Driver or Nightcrawler.

Trevor (the name I gave to the main character and also the killer) he was too concrete in his approach. He just narrowed his focus on his neighbor and killed her without any real thematic implications and there wasn't any nuance in his actions. There was no contemplation or did not have any believable sympathy for his victims.

It also lacked direction since it gave zero insight as to would happen in the rest of movie, all it did was introduce the character with the wrong intent.

Retrospectively, I definitely should have written this script with way more intent, but I guess it is a good lesson for the future. Back to the drawing board!